Here are the pencils cleaned up.
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Again, any critique will be helpful. I'm going to take a little break from this to work on some freelance stuff but this time I will do what I can to fix any mistakes that you guys notice. Thanks for lookin'! :)
Just wanted to post a few quick thoughts. Of all the pages the middle pane of PAGE FIVE is a little unclear. I'm not entirely certain what is going on in there. Other than that your characters, as usual, look great. I think it would be coold if you put END over the apple/cherry just for shits and giggles. I like how you don't entriely confine your characters to the panes. I think you could possibly do more of that on a few pages. I haven't done a comic book in a while so I'm not gonna say too much more but look forward to seeing a colored version.
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